Intro/thesis statement:
Autism is neurodiversity and shouldn't be seen as a disease. There's no need to find a cure. It's a difference in a human that should be embraced and something be should learn to adapt too.
Support #1:
Explain what neurodiversity is. My thought on how Autism should be percieved. Compare it to for example being handicapped and how people learned to adapt to that around their environment by building ramps and creating special parking spots.
Support #2:
Discuss the new elected nominee by Obama to serve on the disability committee. His name is Ali ne'uman. He's the first person to serve that is diagnosed with a autistic disability (aspergers). Discuss Aspergers signs and symptoms and how its not a deformation that would make someone stand out from a crowd.
Support #3:
Discuss treatments that aren't medications. Diseases lead to cures. Cures are medications. Autism can function and live a healthy life without medications.
Support #4: Mentions my brothers diagnosis of aspergers. Talk about his talents. Discuss the topic of self determination with these kinds of kids and how it only makes them want to work harder to prove to everyone else that they're just as qualified. Ambition.
Conclusion: Wrap up all the supporting information. Discuss the idea of neurodiversity. And gather up what autism is.
Your topic is one of the most talked about problems in our world. You have great supporting statements for your paper. One concern of this outline is your thesis doesn't seem complete. Each supporting statement should be included in your thesis so the reader knows ahead of time what there going to read about.
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ReplyDeleteThis looks really interesting. As Will mentioned, this is a very current and important topic to many people. While you do refer to the other position in terms of the "disease" view in your thesis I think you might have to get a little more into the different perspectives from the beginning. Something like "While many view autism as _________________, my view is that it is _______________. I think it will also be important to bring up the other possible points of view in your paper - either as a separate area of support or throughout other areas of support. We'll talk more about it - but what I am suggesting is covered in the "Planting the Naysayer" chapter in They Say, I Say. Since this is such a controversial issue, you really have to address other viewpoints in order to make your argument strong . I am really looking forward to reading it.
This topic sounds very interesting and you have good points of view. You seem very passionate about this topic. However, I agree with professor Decola. By bringing another point of view into your essay, you will be able to construct a stronger essay.
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